Lock and Key

Jarlath Busby
Oct 19
1 min read

Lock and Key

In this tangled nest of neurons,

the mental maze of messengers,

that makes you you and me me;

among the labyrinth of life and learning,

lightless corridors lead to a dark room,

kept under lock and key.

The hidden store of anxiety and fear,

guilt and despair kept wrapped

in the recesses of our minds;

The lock keeper invites you in to look,

then wryly smiling, he turns the key,

and shuts the door behind.

7 Comments

Nigel Smith

Oct 29

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Boom! Love this, 'the mental maze of messengers, 'Labyrinth of life and learning, the whole piece conjours the cats cradle of ever fluctuating emotinal turmoil that many of us live with. thank you Jarlath

Jarlath Busby

a day ago

Replying to

Thanks Nigel. Have reworked it a bit.

A raw idea, scribbled in haste

anarchy not to every taste,

syllables counted, verse refined,

this journey through a tortured mind.

In this tangled nest of neurons,

this maze of mental messengers,

that makes you you and makes me me,

in life and learning’s labyrinth,

a cold dark dungeon of despair,

awaits who dares to try the key.

Self-worth seeps unstemmed, ego ebbs

through eddies of introspection,

this cave of melancholy mined;

Beckoning you, your lock keeper

grins wryly as he turns the key

and shuts the heavy door behind.

Martin Pickard

Oct 23

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I really like this different slant on the theme. Plus some excellent alliteration always appeals

Alison Blevins

Oct 21

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I think you have described the anarchic side of Parkinson’s very well. The feeling of despair comes through.

Stephen Kingsnorth

Oct 21

My usual comment... a few tweaks would make the syllables more rhythmic, but that may not be what you want! I like the 'lateral thinking' approach... and (unusually for me) the theme applied to PD...

Keith Trayling

Oct 20

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got an ominous overtone maybe it's best not to think and analyse too much. our brains have enough going on that confuses. well worth a revisit ,maybe an extra verse or a tweek of it's rhythm. I like it

Jarlath Busby

Oct 20

Replying to

Thanks Keith. The keys often described as opening or revealing something- in this I wanted to consider what they may be keeping locked away and best not disturbed .