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A Chance Encounter

Updated: Nov 23, 2023

I have been struggling to write recently so I decided to take one of my older poems and rework it, this is the result. It is a poem of two voices, a bear and a human each taking alternate lines. I have tried to write it so it can be read as a whole or three separate poems. I’ll leave you to decide which you think is which. I’d be grateful for any feedback to find out if folk think it works. Cheers Ali


It waits

I watch

in the early morning’s quiet

alone in the woods

standing on stiff legs

warm breath hanging

in the cold air

it must know I’m here.

as still as the doe before it bolts

a quickening in my stomach

eyes watching

blood pulsing

anticipating

fight or flee?


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Nigel Smith
Nigel Smith
2023年11月27日

Great stuff Ali, I almost constantly re-work, or re-do my work until i'm content.

いいね!

不明なメンバー
2023年11月23日

That is so clever. It really is three poems! The different colours help. I wonder if you could do more with the title? Something that hints at the trickery in the poem

いいね!
Alison Blevins
Alison Blevins
2023年11月23日
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I agree it was a bit obvious - I've changed it but still not sure... hmmm

いいね!
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